Hi guys. Anyone has some cool idea for a short oneshot that they don't mind i use as practice? You will of course get credit for the story. My own stories are super long and ambitious, so i wanna start with something smaller.

What i like is historical/fantasy. Seinen/adults, horror/thriller/dark. Psychological or philosophical. It can have cool action, but action must not be the sole focus.

Eu realmente fiz só pra passar o tempo, estava com preguiça.

Hey everyone,

I’m currently laying out my comic pages and finding that relying on pure intuition makes the process incredibly slow. I'm actively working and experimenting, but because the layout possibilities are endless, it's hard to get things to come together in a way that actually feels right. I want to move past just "trial and error."

I’ve read Scott McCloud’s Understanding Comics (the section on panel shapes/time on pages 98–103 was great, but the rest felt too abstract) and checked out Matt Madden’s 99 Ways to Tell a Story.

I want to build a logical, structural basis for my pages. Specifically, I'm looking for resources that explain:

• Why choose one panel shape over another? (jagged, slanted, rectangular, circular. etc)
• Why choose one panel ratio over another? (cinematic wide, or super vertical, neutral, etc)
• Why place a panel in a certain spot on the page? (What is it trying to accomplish or say)
• Why size a panel a certain way compared to the ones next to it?

Are there any technical books, blog breakdowns, or video essays that treat page layouts like a science or architectural blueprint rather than just abstract "artistic feeling"?

Thanks!

The Weirdos, a team of misfits, face off against Lilith, the goddess of death.

Hey Y'all i have been writing for a while a small piece that i think is fit for a comic (i cant draw for my life but i think i can write something decent once in a while) and i have been looking for some thoughts and critique about it.

I have written Elevator Pitch, Synopsis, Story beats (which i wont include here, but will if asked), Moodboards and worldbuilding. Feel free to ask any questions or critiques if any arise.

Title: TOON FORCE

The Pitch/Overview: A group of teenagers find themselves transported in cartoon worlds where they discover amazing toon themed powers and are tasked to stop a looming threat.

Synopsis: A group of teenagers, looking for a present for one of the member's grandparents, buys an old VHS reader at a shady flea market, along with a bunch of unmarked cassette tapes. As they go to test if the VHS reader works, they insert one of the unmarked cassettes. As the Televisor colors shift and ebb, they are pulled inside it. Their bodies morph and reshape becoming cartoonish archetypes of themselves.
They have been transported inside the cassette cartoon, the world living and vibrant as if real. As they set their few steps inside the world, they come to understand their new bodies come with newfound powers - the toon force. Their bodies can stretch, shape and mold at their imagination. They can alter probabilities, bend reality and break the proverbial 4th wall as part of their growing abilities. The worlds they will explore and come in aid to will be variegated in themes and form, and they are all under a common threat. The teens will face adversities, creatures and enemies hellbent in destroying the cartoon worlds - The Scratch, creatures composed of white noises, statics, inkblots, filmburns and clippings that have turned to destruction.
The teens will come to discover that they aren't the only humans that have been wandering the cartoon worlds, and it seems that some have malicious intentions with the powers that these worlds allow. They will meet new allies and fight foes in their journeys, as they struggle with the weight of the reality that progressively feels more vapid and depressing. The World may be in danger, but they will do what it takes and heed on to adventure to save the animated worlds, and their own. 

Themes: Creativity vs Consumption, Imagination, Growing Up, Preservation of Art, “What makes art worth remembering?”. Will include comedy, mystery, action, dark comedy at bits, personal growth, worldview growth. Similar products may be Syfy “Happy!” Disney’s “Gravity Falls” “Owl House” Atlus “Persona 4” or even remotely “Pagemaster”.

Character Bios: 
-Jacob Bailey: A 18 year old of American origins, son of the middle working class, slender stature, fritzy brown hair, usually sporting a V-neck tee, large jeans and red hot sneakers, always looming on his smartphone. Jacob's parents divorced when he was 9 and since then he struggled in forming long lasting connections with his peers, seemingly having lost trust in human connection. Lina, Alex and Sven, the few friends that he has, support him in his everyday struggle with depression and his inner conflicts. Sometimes Jacob questions their motives to be his friend, but they always remind him that they are there for him cause they like him. He spends most of his days consuming media over media. Video, reels, shorts and so on, and beyond that small laugh he gains no pleasure from the consumption. He dabbles in deadpan comedy and dad jokes, something that he learned from his grandfather Mike. In his journey through the cartoon worlds he will learn the power of a good hearted laugh and the determination to overcome his inner turmoils.

His appearance in the Cartoon World is not too far away from his normal appearance in the real world, with a 30’-40’ stylized caricature of himself with slight interchange in clothing to better fit the world. Being a “blank slate” Its   powers are heavily based on its own imagination with its main feature being able to rubber-hose stretch, enlarge or shrink at will. His Toon Force relies massively on comedy. The more he believes one of his moves or tricks will be funny, the more powerful they will be. He sees themselves as comedical in the way GenZ’s may find themselves comedical, with rather dadaist sense of humor tending to nonsense or with very grounded jokes based on very dry premises, to the point of being almost passing for unfunny.

Defining Catchphrase: *creates the onomatopoeia of a steel pipe falling to the ground*

-Lina Maltese: A 19 years old girl of Italian origins, wealthy family, short dyed hairs, colorful tomboy-ish clothing, piercings, always sporting an old fashioned slingshot with her with which she is a true and tested crackshot. Her great-grandparents moved to America in 1942 where they opened a small business of Delis and baked goods that have been inherited down to the generations. Later on they expanded to other businesses such as Fashion brands import and pizzerias, being able to accrue quite high sums of wealth. A true Daredevil, Lina always steered away from the wants and wills of her parents, trying to seek new thrills and emotions to every possible occasion. A “yes-girl” of sorts she never shies to getting herself in opportunities (or troubles) this mostly inspired by the things she watched as a growing child, mostly including Western movies and her favorites of all “Lucky Luke”. She has grown fond of Jacob, both being quite close despite their very clashing personalities. 

Her Cartoon World appearance warps to the one of the archetypal “desperado”, sporting a duster and poncho with comedically big spurs and hat. Her Toon Force relies heavily on improbable finesse in gunslinging, as her slingshot turns into a multipurpose rubbery revolver in the Cartoon World. Impossible ricochets, stopping and curving projectiles, spinning her revolver to create whirlwinds, stretching her eyes to make binoculars and scopes, pulling the gun barrel to make it a rifle are some of the many things that she could do with her newfound powers.

Defining Catchphrase: “Are you feeling funny, punk?”

-Alex Rodriguez: Standing for Alejandro, who later preferred a more neutral name, is a 19 years old Latin-American in transition from male to female, small stature, round glasses, medium corvine hairs, sporting baggy clothing. They and their parents are from a big family of many members which are really devout to the meaning of family and belonging. Their parents, brothers and sisters, as well as them, work hard to make a living, being united in the struggles of everyday America. Their parents, despite the age, fully understood almost naturally and accepted his being trans, making it very comfortable for them to follow their journey into it. Its initial shyness is a cloak that conceals their cranky, almost fierce personality, especially when conversations revolve around anime culture and figurines. They are deeply passionate about dating sims and Japanese romance, to the point that many question how they get some niche knowledge. This side of them is only shown to those close to them, otherwise they show themselves to be almost antisocial. They and Jacob came close due to a passion for bad reels and games.their exchanges would be mostly silent, but that didn't diminish the presence for each other.

Their cartoon world mirrors their personality. At their dormant state, they appear as a meek and frail magical girl, where their Toon Force translates in Power of Love. they are able to mend, heal and soothe their friends in cartoonish ways. Hot chicken soups, impossibly big bandages, forehead kisses. Their normal state, where they don't believe they are up to the task.
However when they are psyched or absolutely confident in themselves (either that confidence may be truthful or not)it's where their true “magical transformation” takes place.

When this happens, their Toon Force shifts into Power of Mayhem. Their appearance also shifts into one of a stylized fighter monk with detailed body mass (almost exaggerated) and huge fighting gloves. Power of Violence takes their raw power to extremes, being able to pick their foes outlines rendering them to dust, uppercutting villains into above panels, wearing enemies like sock puppets and making them fight each other, shattering them with a single jab and transforming them into piles of bricks. Being this powerful and Alex so unconfident in themselves a single crack in their make-believe chances of winning may revert the transformation.

Defining Catchphrase: “My body is a temple, but these fists are open for business!”

-Sven Bergson: An 18 year old exchange student from Sweden, round soft shape, very poor spoken English, usually communicates with gestures and expressions, sports very clean, precise clothing. Sven has been sent abroad by his parents to study different cultures, and although his English is quite poor (despite English being very common in Sweden) he was able to befriend Jacob alongside Lina and Alex. He doesn't speak much if at all, but he makes himself understood through a variety of manners. A grounded guy with an aloof and mellow personality, and oddly so, an amazing conflict mediator, He always finds a way to create common ground where dialogue is the solution to the problem.

In the Cartoon world his shape is dictated by the environment they find themselves in, with a recurring theme: being soft. In a world made of plants he may resemble a dandelion, in a world made of clay he may appear as a squishy ball of clay. His Toon Force revolves around plasticity. As his appearance changes so can his properties. At will he could shape into any weapon or useful paraphernalia, even a completely imagined one that is apt for the specific situation. In his Cartoon world shape he is also able to discern the speech of some of the inhabitants to which may sound like gibberish to the other members of the group. However Sven is only able to communicate to his peers through more colorful onomatopoeia, signposts with single worlds, or expressions.

Defining Catchphrase: “:O :)”

-Michael Bailey: Known as “Pops Mike” He is 68 years old of American origins, father of Richard Bailey and grandfather of Jacob. Square body and slightly hunched with an almost wizard like white beard, wearing a polo and brown pants, always seen with a small sketchbook full of doodles of any sort. He took in Jacob when his parents divorced, although this tentative to protect the young Jacob didn't stop his onset of mental issues and apathy. Mike always tries his best for his grandson, despite being unable to understand most of Jacob's inner world. A supportive grandparent and quite the zany and caricatural person, Mike worked as an animator in his youth, developing a set of artistic skills that stayed with him even in his late years. To this day his craftsmanship in drawing is still fabled, being able to sketch anything in seconds.

As Pops Mike comes in contact with the cartoon worlds his appearance shifts to the one of a very old time wizard with a beard that covers his whole face, donning a robe with star pattern, a pointy hat and slippers, wielding a tiny very much regular wand.

However, Pops Mike is the true definition of “more than meets the eyes.” His Toon Force compared to the teens is unmatched, being able to tap directly into the more founding power of the Toon Force itself: creation. Pops Mike can bend the cartoon reality at its own will, and being an animator he knows very well where to bend and stretch every rule. He can stretch his wand to either be a pencil or a brush, and draw whatever it pleases into being, to the point of breaking the 4th wall.
He can crush the panels, stretch the visuals of the background to make it seem up close enemies are impossibly far away, turn panels upside down and therefore the gravity and even push creatures outside the pages or into others. If he is creative enough he could wield the whole power of the sun by just closing in to the field of view and becoming big enough that to him the sun becomes the size of a cookie.

However, Pops Mike is hard restricted by its own knowledge of animation. He struggles to understand newer forms of animation and therefore his Toon Force is bound to classic rubber hose antics. Moreover, due to his old age, the Toon Force strains him too much to be used for a prolonged time.

Defining Catchphrase: Prepare to meet THE maker.

-Edwin McGill: A mid 40’s American man, sleek back hairs, well dressed, slender well built stature, owner of the McGill studios and the streaming platform “Binge.” Son of one of Michael's ex-coworkers, He is an entrepreneur with a deep seated love for animation, of which he passionately consumes every shape and form. He has a colorful personality, but when things get serious he doesn't shy to show his leadership and cut-throat corporate side. Once he comes in contact with the Cartoon Worlds, it dawns on him to have discovered the holy grail of animation, and a treasure trove for his streaming platform. More than just a product, he sees art in the cassette tapes, and as a curator of the animated arts he seeks to preserve them to avoid them getting lost in time, and digitizing them would be his way to preserve them forever.

His good intentions are paved by bad actions and will be up to the teens to confront and stop his plans that may pose a threat to the world.

The Physical World: The adventures in the real world take place in the area between Queens and Manhattan, with the local hustle of the busy city and the not-so-quiet suburbs. Graffiti, small-time gangs, small cultural shops. The true and tested identity of America. The timeframe we go through is the contemporary world 2025-2026 with all the comforts of the sort. The story length will span roughly a year, having its beginning in September.

The Alternative World: The Alternate world where the story takes place is the Cartoon World(s) which vary in themes and style according to the plot demands. There may be adventures taking place in Castle & Kingdoms, Cowboys & Bandits, Space travelers & Aliens, plastic moldable worlds of clay, Spooky mansion & Ghosts, to name a few. The one core rule of these worlds is that they will act just like a Cartoon Episode where the protagonists are tasked in multiple ways to reach the “end” of the episode. 

Lore & Magic/Tech: Regarding the Toon Force at which the protagonists tap their abilities in, it's a plastic ability that is differentiated by their users. It molds over the personal characteristics of their user, their outer and inner state and it shows itself as what could be roughly defined as “cartoon logic”. Stretchy limbs, Onomatopoeia, defy regular world rules. The protagonists will show themselves with different types of abilities that will bend and break rules of logic, all depending almost solely on their creativity and imagination to stretch further their powers.

Thank you for anyone interested in reading and giving their opinion! i will try to answer any questions that come up or to clear any doubts. I really appreciate any help!

For about a year or so now, I've been working on my webcomic called Excalibur, a modern take on arthurian legend. It's my first official go at making comics and so it's been an interesting journey so far!

One of the things that tend to trip me up a bit is thinking through visualizing sound effects and even knowing what all to include without the pages feeling too busy. I come from an animation background, so sometimes the translation to comics can be a bit challenging, though I think I've started to pick up on my comic ques that I should incorporate!

Anyway, these are the first few pages of the first issue. Would love your feedback on the hook, story pacing, and if I'm communicating the action beats well! Also, if you'd like the see more, I can post the rest in installments! :)

Context: Olivia - The one with the phone out in the first page - Is letting someone she's fallen in love with know she arrived at her place for a planned hangout. Problem? Well she has awful social paranoia, thinks everyone is out to get her and the woman in the suit is a representation of that.

Also worth noting that in this world people can just not have facial features - It's a long story but basically the theme is with identity and the couple in question deals with feeling like a freak on the inside and feeling like one on the outside.

New Pages 4-6 are here!

Adam, first man, original dick, defeated Lucifer and declared himself rightful king of Hell. Between praise, mountains of food, bright lights, and an ever growing ego…that arrow could never rain on his parade. Or could it?

Start here with Pages 1-3: https://www.reddit.com/user/Sufficient_Toe2758/comments/1ufbfn6/adams_fattening_hazbin_hotel_au_comic_pages_13/

Hi everyone. I made a post last week about a comic I'm working on about a guy and his dog who gain abilities from a meteorite fragment. I've reworked the initial concept a good bit and instead of focusing on Baxter and Morgan, there will be a team of heroes, all with their own backstory. This is the intro and the first chapter to Baxter and Morgan's story. I know it isn't much to go off of but please let me know what you think.

ZAP AND THE ZIPPER

“By xxxxxxxxxxx”

Morgan Sparrow just turned 18 and he just finished his last year of school. He wants to spend his last summer before college spending time with his friends and his girlfriend of 2 years, Sam. His plans are sent askew when one day as he is walking his dog, a rock hits him in the head and changes his life forever. Morgan picks up the rock to discover that it is glowing and there looks to be electricity inside. The rock breaks and Morgan is overtaken by the electricity inside....and so is his dog Baxter. The next morning, Morgan is shocked to find that his dog can talk....but that’s not all. They are both gifted with amazing abilities!

However, they aren’t the only ones to come across a strange meteor fragment.  Luke Finch, a kid in Morgan’s class was often bullied for being weak and nerdy. Though Morgan was ashamed of it, he often joined in on the jokes to fit in. The truth was, he always felt bad for Luke. On the same day as Morgan, Luke was trying to outrun a number of bullies. He got to a bridge, but they caught up with him and threw him into the river below. He made his way out, and his arm was broken. A meteor fragment falls from the sky and his new abilities healed his broken arm. He decides to plan his revenge and gate crash his classes graduation party. As everyone runs away, Morgan stays to try and stop him. Will he be able to talk him down? Or will it escalate into a fight?

Introduction

On the 22^nd of June 2018, at approximately 2:35 pm, a meteor flew into the earth’s atmosphere, and landed in the Irish Sea. However, fragments of the meteorite broke off as it entered the atmosphere, and were spread across Ireland and the UK. This day changed Earth forever as it ushered the beginning of what became known as the “Hero Age” of our history. Of course, with every super hero, there comes a slew of villains. Most of the time, power ends up in the wrong hands, and there’s nothing that we can do about that. But sometimes, power ends up exactly where it needs to be, with who it needs to be with.

1.

On a burning hot day, Morgan Sparrow is walking his dog, Baxter. He is on the phone to his Girlfriend Sam. “Can’t wait to see you tomorrow, we’ll need a few drinks and maybe a smoke or two after all those exams.” Morgan says gleefully. “Oh stop don’t I know. I studied my arse off so it would want to be worth it in the end!” Sam said, with excitement. “I’m certain it will be. You’re far cleverer than I or anyone else in our class, as well as more beautiful too.” He replied, flirtatiously. “Stoooop, you’re so soft you know that.” Sam said jokingly. “Yeah, but I can be pretty tough when I want to be too.” Morgan replied. “Yeahhhh, sure you can.” They both laugh, “Anyway, I have to finish walking Baxter so I’ll call you back later. Love you” he said. “Love you too tough guy” she replies.

He hangs up the phone and lets Baxter off his leash to run around on the grass. He pulls out a rope toy for them to play and Baxter decides he wants to play tug of war. After a bit of back and forth, Baxter eventually wins. Morgan decides to sit on the grass as Baxter runs circles around him as he usually does after a game of tug of war. Morgan takes out his phone again and decides to video Baxter.

All of a sudden, Morgan notices a shift in the air. It felt...heavier, more static. The hairs on his arms begin to raise and he feels a shiver, despite the hot sunny day still before him.  Baxter had ran for a considerable time and Morgan felt it was time to leave. He calls Baxter over and starts to get up, when a rock falls from the sky and hits him in the head. “Ow!” he squeals. Baxter comes to make sure he is okay. Morgan pets him and says “Dont worry buddy I’m okay. It was just this- woah, weird rock”. The rock is glowing an orange colour and looks to be slightly transparent. It’s hard to make out, but it looks like there is a bolt of lightning inside. The rock begins to crack open and the bolt of lightning inside begins to spread across Morgan’s body. He is still petting Baxter, so it spreads across his body too. “OH GOD!” Morgan shouts as Baxter lets out a whimpering noise. As it stops they both fall to the ground and pass out.

See how my manga project is going give me your honest thoughts and feedback to improve

Hi! I'm working on a bar fight scene with a lot of broken panels with a 4 row structure (at least with this page). How does the action flow?

Thanks!

Hello! I’m incredibly new to making comics, and as a little intro: I LOVE zombie apocalypses/twd and have a fursona/character named Malachi who is a sled dog.

Anyway, tonight I decided I should finally just draw SOMETHING because i’ve always wanted to make a comic for him but truly have been too lazy lol

Malachi to me is a confident dude, he’s a simple black wolf and he’s very sociable and is pretty cool with everyone. He’s young, 16-17ish (as his story is a bit metaphorical to me growing up and interactions, memories, people, etc.

BUT onto the comic page, let me explain what’s going on. Panel 1, Malachi is packing up and getting ready for a solo expedition in which he goes to different “markers” through snowy, icy terrain to deliver and pick up different things. It’s about a week long, and this is a sport he’s done for awhile but this is still pretty big and exciting for him. (Also incase anyone wants more context, dog sledding/mushing in this universe is the people(?) furries? pull the sled and it’s more of a delivery thing, no one really controls from behind the sled. It can be done in teams or solo).

Panel 2, not much but it introduces this character that is in the distance, an i want it to be something to engage the reader. Like, they see this dude and it’s clear he’s coming and going to be the next event? or character introduced that malachi interacts with.

Panel 3 & 4 really gives this new character a mystery feel and like, who is this dude? What’s he doing, that’s what i was tryna go for. Malachi during this is wrapping up packing, he’s tired and still in his own world

panel 5 he’s stretching, and 6 he finally notices this guy with a glance, and i added the ?? to show he’s still processing who it is. I wanted this all to add up and be a suspenseful, I wanna turn the page and see what’s gonna happen thing. I also hope that i’ve created a nice contrast of malachi and this character approaching.

Anyway, any tips really! I don’t care much about anatomy though as that isn’t my main focus, but more composition and how good the story telling is for this, aswell as any tutorials or tips anyone has!!

One of the things I'm trying to do with this is escape the Neil Gaiman influence, to something re-sanctified.

Any critique welcome, rip it to shreds if you want to. I would especially like to know:

Are there any page turns that feel awkward or confusing?
Any bits where it's confusing what's actually happening?

Good bits/corny bits?

: )

With ‘Eliza - The Ghost in Every Machine’

With ‘Eliza - The Ghost in Every Machine’

Hi everyone)
Need your advice about creating a story for it, developing the characters, and so on. Maybe some tips for creating it faster and better

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(el último es el definitivo)

For my comic DeathToll

Unfinished page, obviously.
Context; he woman being approached is losing her vision, and is seeing everything blurrier and brighter. Now, I've been looking at the screen a while AND I have writers bias and know everything that goes on in this story, so I wanted to know;

- Does this page convey the fact she's losing her vision well?

- Does it hurt/take too much effort to look at and process?

Edit: Forgot to mention, the red layer is meant to be a placeholder for alarm lighting

Geo, Ger, and Rodi.